| Beaty's First Haiku Attempt; Confused over syllable counting! | |
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| Beaty | Dec 31 2017, 12:55 PM Post #1 |
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OK, I hate to be the first to show an example - but if other's can learn from my mistakes it'll be worth the embarrassment! I should admit that I found counting syllables not as easy as I first imagined. I was surprised that there seemed to be some debate about just how many syllables form certain word, and I ended up changing some of my words several times...Which, in turn, had a knock on effect. I'm still a little unsure if I have the correct number of syllables! Also, I'm not sure whether Haiku requires titles? In a way, I think that giving it a title sort of gives the game away as I *think* all the information is in the Haiku itself...? Anyway, without further ado... Broiling and tumbling the hostile leaden foam pounds; resigned is the shore Beaty Edited by Beaty, Dec 31 2017, 12:57 PM.
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| harrydewulf | Dec 31 2017, 04:55 PM Post #2 |
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I don't have any disagreement with the syllable count. I'm curious to know what words were giving you difficulty. I'm not happy with "leaden foam" - in Haiku ideas are often juxtaposed but images are rarely in open conflict. Switching from describing the breakers to the "attitude" of the shore is a good balance. |
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